30分帮帮忙检查英语文章看咯这篇有语法错误么,帮我改出来,谁改对了就给30分,不食言Help?HappyDo you hear an idiom?Give one a rose,and you hands are sweet-smelling!From this,I write a story!Please listen:One day,I go to th

30分帮帮忙检查英语文章看咯这篇有语法错误么,帮我改出来,谁改对了就给30分,不食言Help?HappyDo you hear an idiom?Give one a rose,and you hands are sweet-smelling!From this,I write a story!Please listen:One day,I go to th
30分帮帮忙检查英语文章
看咯这篇有语法错误么,帮我改出来,谁改对了就给30分,不食言
Help?Happy
Do you hear an idiom?Give one a rose,and you hands are sweet-smelling!
From this,I write a story!Please listen:
One day,I go to the forest and I want play in there.I meet a dog.What’s your name?I ask.Lucky!Wow,a nice name.Why does anybody call you lucky?Aha,let me take a story to you.
Two years ago,I’m only one years old.And I have a bad sick.Many doctors say:maybe you’ll die,or have the sick every time.I know this.I usually cry.I have no happy time.One day,a helpful sheep doctor tells me:I can help you.I know,many doctors have a magic medicine,but they don’t want give it for other animals.I have a,too.I want give you and I can make you better.Relay?Yes!Spend two month ago,I’m better again.So I have a new name:Lucky.I thank her a lot.And she only says:maybe I must do it,because I’m a doctor.I’m very happy.
Many animals know this thing,and they call the doctor kind Angel!
Give one a rose,and you hands are sweet-smelling!Let give help and love to everyone!

30分帮帮忙检查英语文章看咯这篇有语法错误么,帮我改出来,谁改对了就给30分,不食言Help?HappyDo you hear an idiom?Give one a rose,and you hands are sweet-smelling!From this,I write a story!Please listen:One day,I go to th
题目应该是名词吧!
Happiness
I wrote a story.
please listen 与其不是很好,建议换为:here is the story.
既然用到了多种饮用,间接的直接的,希望能够分得更明确些.要么都加上引号,要么都指明人称.
have the sick搭配错误,应该是desease
usually cry 在这里表达错误,应该是often
后面给药有一句是i have a,too.冠词用错了,再加上连接词应该是and (well) i have one,too.
relay?拼写错误
spend two month ago,i am better again.可换为：it cost me two months to recover myself.
倒数第二段,know this thing,thing多余,删掉.
看文章,知道你写得也不容易.
就这样了,你在顺一顺语句就好了.

1：One day, I go to the forest and I want play in there：应该是want to play（want to do）
Two years ago这一段应该是过去时态，所以都应该用过去式：I'm 改为 I was
I have 改为 I had say改为said 等等，还有，你那个医生说的话从哪里结束？不晓得啊，医生说的话里面不用...

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1：One day, I go to the forest and I want play in there：应该是want to play（want to do）
Two years ago这一段应该是过去时态，所以都应该用过去式：I'm 改为 I was
I have 改为 I had say改为said 等等，还有，你那个医生说的话从哪里结束？不晓得啊，医生说的话里面不用改过去时 ，还有 one years old应该改为 one year old，1岁不用负数
好像从整体看，你这篇文章都应该用过去时态？！你自己再看看吧，我只能帮你到这里了

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一.I write a story——改成write down
二.I go to the forest and I want play in there——改成I go to the forest for playing
三、Why does anybody ——改成anothers
四、take a story ——改成tell a story
五、And I ...

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一.I write a story——改成write down
二.I go to the forest and I want play in there——改成I go to the forest for playing
三、Why does anybody ——改成anothers
四、take a story ——改成tell a story
五、And I have a bad sick——改成And I got serious illness
maybe you’ll die——改成i'm dying
I’m only one years old——i was
Many doctors say——said
先去吃饭啦，第三段的时态全错

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一、one改为 one”s

大部分改的我用括号了，少部分你自己校对。另外对话格式错了，但我已经改过来了。还有你开头和结尾的那个idiom要用引号，已经改了。
Help? Happy
Do you hear an idiom? "Give one a rose, and you hands are sweet-smelling!"
From this, I write a story! Pleas...

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大部分改的我用括号了，少部分你自己校对。另外对话格式错了，但我已经改过来了。还有你开头和结尾的那个idiom要用引号，已经改了。
Help? Happy
Do you hear an idiom? "Give one a rose, and you hands are sweet-smelling!"
From this, I write a story! Please listen:
One day, I go to the forest and I want (to) play in there. I meet a dog.
"What’s your name?" I ask.
"Lucky!"
"Wow, a nice name. Why (do) (people) call you lucky? Aha, let me (tell you a story)".
"Two years ago, I (was) only one years(不需要s) old. (Don't start a sentence with "and") And I (was having) a bad （cold). Many doctors say: maybe you’ll die, or have the sick every time. (改：Many doctors said that I would die or be sick all the time.)I (knew) this. I usually cry. I (thought that would never be happy again.). (However,) one day, a helpful sheep doctor tells me: I can help you. (改：However, one day, a helpful sheep doctor told me that he could help me.) I (knew) (that) many doctors have a magic medicine, but they (didn't) want (to) give it (to) other animals.
He said: "I have (one), too (and) I want (to) give (it) (to) you (so that) I can make you (feel) better."
"(Really)?"
" Yes!"
(It took me two months to recover again), so I have a new name: Lucky. I (feel so grateful and she told me that she felt the responsibility to help me since she was a doctor). I’m very happy.
Many animals know this thing, and they call the doctor kind Angel!
"Give one a rose, and you hands are sweet-smelling! Let give help and love to everyone!"

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