6小时,作文改错,However,although she is a good mother,she denied facing the real situation in her family.Tom wants to be a poet.He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s

6小时,作文改错,However,although she is a good mother,she denied facing the real situation in her family.Tom wants to be a poet.He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s
6小时,作文改错,
However,although she is a good mother,she denied facing the real situation in her family.Tom wants to be a poet.He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s crippled and has no jobs (1131).In addition,she is too shy to communicate with others.In Amanda’s dream,she wants Tom earn a lot of money and Laura can find a rich husband.Unfortunately,she just lives in her own dream,her manufacture illusions.
Amanda talks to Tom that “You live in a dream (1131)”.In fact,she is right.Tom’s dream is to be a poet.However,the social situation stops his dream.Tom has to work hard in the warehouse.He has to get wages to support his family.After working,he has to come back home and lives with two dependent women.He feels mentally and physically tired.He feels very disappointed.He gives up all his concentration on working and doesn’t have the motivation to change his life.Therefore,he wants to be a special person and always dreams to be a movie star.For example,he always goes to the cinema at midnight.Therefore,Tom always goes to see movies.As he mentioned,he wants to be the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He wants to do things whatever he wants.In short,he gives up his life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life,she just lives in her own world.She has a lot of glass.When Jim came in,she shows him her favorite glass unicorn.Here the unicorn means her source.Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl.She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people.When she goes to college,she is too shy to finish her course.She doesn’t want to communicate with other people,so she stays at home and play her glass.When Jim,the person she loves,comes into her own room,she shows her glass to Jim.Here,the glass unicorn can represent the personality of Laura,which is very easy to crash.She lives in her glass dream.Therefore,when Jim rejects her love,Laura’s heart is broken,such as the crash of glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of the manufacturing illusions; however,she does not recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing.Not only Tom but also Amanda and Laura live in their dream.All of three people don’t have the courage to face the problems in their lives.It’s so sad that this family is living in the dream.

6小时,作文改错,However,although she is a good mother,she denied facing the real situation in her family.Tom wants to be a poet.He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s
However,(although->though) she is a good mother,(去掉逗号）she (denied facing -> refused to face) the real situation in her family.Tom wants to be a poet.He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time (on->in) the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s crippled and has no jobs (1131)(*少了一个").(In addition-> Besides),she is too shy to communicate with (+the) others.In Amanda’s dream,she (wants Tom -> wanted for Tom to) earn a lot of money and (Laura can-> for Laura to be able to) find a rich husband.Unfortunately,she (just lives-> lives only) in her own dream,her (manufacture-> premeditated) illusions.
Amanda （talks to-〉tells/told) Tom that “You live in a dream (1131)”.In fact,(去掉逗号）she is right.（+It's ) Tom’s dream (-is) to be a poet.However,the (social situation?不懂想表达什么,可以考虑circumstance 这个词） stops his dream.Tom has to work hard in the warehouse（.He has -> in order ) to (get wages-> earn wages 或 get paid) to support his family.After working,he has to come (back home and lives-> home to share his life) with two dependent women.He feels mentally and physically (tired.He feels very disappointed.->exhausted and very frustrated.) He (gives up all his concentration on working->loses all his focus at work 或 loses all his desire to work) and (doesn’t have the->has little) motivation to change his life.Therefore,he wants to be a special person and (+he) always dreams to (be->become) a movie star.(For example,->That explains why) he always goes to the cinema at midnight(.Therefore,Tom always->and why he) goes to (-see) movies (+so often).As he mentioned,he wants to be the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He (wants to do things->would like to do) whatever he wants.In short,he (gives up his->escapes from his real) life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life,she (just lives->lives only) in her own world.She has a lot of (+things made in) glass.When Jim came in,she (shows->showed) him (her favorite glass unicorn.Here the unicorn means->the glass unicorn - her favorite,a symbol of) her source(不懂source在此作何解释）.Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl.She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people.When she goes to college,she is too shy to finish her course.She doesn’t (want->feel comfortable) to communicate with other people,so she stays at home and play (+with) her glass(+es).When Jim,the person she loves,comes into her (-own) room,she shows (her glass to Jim->him her glass).Here,the glass unicorn (can represent the personality of Laura->may be interpreted as Laura's personality),which (is very easy to crash-> can very easily crash).She lives in her glass dream.Therefore,when Jim rejects her love,Laura’s heart is broken,(such as->just like) the crash of glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of (the manufacturing->his premeditated) illusions; however,she (does not->fails to) recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing.Not only Tom but (-also) Amanda and Laura (+all ) live in their dream(+s).(All of three people don’t have->None of the three has) the courage to (face->confront 或deal with) the problems in their lives.It’s so sad that this (+whole) family is living in (-the) dream(+s).
注：我保留了原文添加了改善的方式,希望你能看得懂.此外,全文的时态应该要重新斟酌一下.虽然是读书报告的样式,个人认为用现在时不太恰当.

However, although she is a good mother, she denied to face the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse. Laura is a...

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However, although she is a good mother, she denied to face the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend the whole time on the warehouse. Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s crippled and has no jobs (1131).In addition, she is too shy to communicate with others. In Amanda’s dream, she wants Tom earn a lot of money and Laura can find a rich husband. Unfortunately, she just lives in her own dream, her manufacture illusions.
Amanda talks to Tom that “You live in a dream (1131)”. In fact, she is right. Tom’s dream is to be a poet. However, the social situation stops his dream. Tom has to work hard in the warehouse. He has to get wages to support his family. After working, he has to come back home and lives with two dependent women. He feels mentally and physically tired. He feels very disappointed. He gives up all his concentration on working and doesn’t have the motivation to change his life. Therefore, he wants to be a special person and always dreams to be a movie star. For example, he always goes to the cinema at midnight. Therefore, Tom always goes to see movies. As he mentioned, he wants to be the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He wants to do things whatever he wants. In short, he gives up his life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life, she just lives in her own world. She has a lot of glass. When Jim came in, she shows him her favorite glass unicorn. Here the unicorn means her source. Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl. She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people. When she goes to college, she is too shy to finish her course. She doesn’t want to communicate with other people, so she stays at home and play her glass. When Jim, the person she loves, comes into her own room, she shows her glass to Jim. Here, the glass unicorn can represent the personality of Laura, which is very easy to crash. She lives in her glass dream. Therefore, when Jim rejects her love, Laura’s heart is broken, such as the crash of glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of the manufacturing illusions; however, she does not recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing. Not only Tom but also Amanda and Laura live in their dream. All of three people don’t have the courage to face the problems in their lives. It’s so sad that this family is living in the dream.
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Although she is a good mother(however 和 although 不能一起用) she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend his entire time on the wareh...

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Although she is a good mother(however 和 although 不能一起用) she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend his entire time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s crippled and has no job(1131).In addition, she is too shy to communicate with others. In Amanda’s dream, she wants Tom earn a lot of money and Laura to find a rich husband.Unfortunately, that's only her dream, her manufacture illusions.
Amanda tells Tom that he lives in a dream (1131)”. In fact, she is right. Tom’s dream is to be a poet. However, the social situation stops him from achieving his dream. Tom has to work hard in the warehouse. He has to get wages to support his family. After working, he has to go back home and live with two dependent women. He feels mentally and physically tired. He feels very disappointed. He gives up all his concentration on working and doesn’t have the motivation to change his life.Therefore, Tom always goes to see movies. As he mentioned, he wants to live the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He wants to do whatever he wants. In short, he gives up his life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life, she just lives in her own world.She has a lot of glass. When Jim came in, she shows him her favorite glass unicorn. Here the unicorn means her source. Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl. She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people. When she goes to college, she is too shy to finish her course. She doesn’t want to communicate with other people, so she stays at home and play her glass. When Jim, the person she loves, comes into her own room, she shows her glass to Jim. Here, the glass unicorn can represent the personality of Laura, which is very easy to shatter.She lives in her glass dream. Therefore, when Jim rejects her love, Laura’s heart is broken, such as shattered glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of his manufacturing illusions; however, she does not recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing. Not only Tom but also Amanda and Laura live in their dreams. All three of them don’t have the courage to face the problems in their lives. It’s so sad that this family is living in their dreams.

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Although she is a good mother she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend his entire time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried...

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Although she is a good mother she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend his entire time on the warehouse.Laura is an unmarried sister “…who’s crippled and has no job(1131).In addition, she is too shy to communicate with others. In Amanda’s dream, she wants Tom earn a lot of money and Laura to find a rich husband.Unfortunately, that's only her dream, her manufacture illusions.
Amanda tells Tom that he lives in a dream (1131)”. In fact, she is right. Tom’s dream is to be a poet. However, the social situation stops him from achieving his dream. Tom has to work hard in the warehouse. He has to get wages to support his family. After working, he has to go back home and live with two dependent women. He feels mentally and physically tired. He feels very disappointed. He gives up all his concentration on working and doesn’t have the motivation to change his life.Therefore, Tom always goes to see movies. As he mentioned, he wants to live the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He wants to do whatever he wants. In short, he gives up his life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life, she just lives in her own world.She has a lot of glass. When Jim came in, she shows him her favorite glass unicorn. Here the unicorn means her source. Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl. She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people. When she goes to college, she is too shy to finish her course. She doesn’t want to communicate with other people, so she stays at home and play her glass. When Jim, the person she loves, comes into her own room, she shows her glass to Jim. Here, the glass unicorn can represent the personality of Laura, which is very easy to shatter.She lives in her glass dream. Therefore, when Jim rejects her love, Laura’s heart is broken, such as shattered glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of his manufacturing illusions; however, she does not recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing. Not only Tom but also Amanda and Laura live in their dreams. All three of them don’t have the courage to face the problems in their lives. It’s so sad that this family is living in their dreams.

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However, although she is a good mother, she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend(spends) the whole time on the warehouse. Lau...

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However, although she is a good mother, she denied facing the real situation in her family. Tom wants to be a poet. He doesn’t want to earn money and spend(spends) the whole time on the warehouse. Laura is his unmarried sister “…who’s(and who is) crippled and has no jobs (1131).In addition, she is too shy to communicate with others. In Amanda’s dream, she wants Tom earn a lot of money and(then) Laura can find a rich husband. Unfortunately, she just lives in her own dream, her manufacture illusions.
Amanda talks to Tom that “You live in a dream (1131)”. In fact, she is right. Tom’s dream is to be a poet. However, the social situation stops his dream. Tom has to work hard in the warehouse. He has to get wages (earn money)to support his family. After working, he has to come back home and lives with two dependent women. He feels mentally and physically tired. He feels very disappointed. He gives up (put)all his concentration on working and doesn’t have the motivation to change his life. Therefore, he wants to be a special person and always dreams to be a movie star. For example, he always goes to the cinema at midnight. Therefore, Tom always goes to see movies. As he mentioned, he wants to be the life of “Killer Wingfield (1098)”.He wants to do things whatever he wants. In short, he gives up his life and lives in his abstract dream.
In Laura’s life, she just lives in her own world. She has a lot of glass. When Jim came in, she shows him her favorite glass unicorn. Here the unicorn means her source. Laura is a very shy and sensitive girl. She doesn’t have enough self-confidence to meet people. When she goes to college, she is too shy to finish her course. She doesn’t want to communicate with other people, so she stays at home and play her glass. When Jim, the person she loves, comes into her own room, she shows her glass to Jim. Here, the glass unicorn can represent the personality of Laura, which is very easy to crash. She lives in her glass dream. Therefore, when Jim rejects her love, Laura’s heart is broken, such as the crash of glass.
Amanda laughs at Tom because of the manufacturing illusions; however, she does not recognize that she herself is guilty of the same thing. Not only Tom but also Amanda and Laura live in their dream. All of three people don’t have the courage to face the problems in their lives. It’s so sad that this family is (are)living in the dream.

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