help me!请高手看看有没有语法错误!Good morning,my name is yuying,It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself,I hope i can make a good performance today .Now i will introduce myself ,I am 24 years old,born in Har

help me!请高手看看有没有语法错误!Good morning,my name is yuying,It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself,I hope i can make a good performance today .Now i will introduce myself ,I am 24 years old,born in Har
help me!请高手看看有没有语法错误!
Good morning,my name is yuying,It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself,I hope i can make a good performance today .Now i will introduce myself ,I am 24 years old,born in Harbin City .I graduated from Harbin University of Commerce.
My major is Accounting.And i got my bachelor degree after my graduation in the year of 2011.I spend most of my time on study ,I have passed CET4.And i have acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time.In July 2011,I began work for aprivate company as a Accounting in Haerbin city.
I have a dream since I was a child.I dream that one day I can fly in the blue sky like the bird.Now I have the chance to make it come true.If i can take this job.I’ll try my best to do everything well.Because .I love this job.

help me!请高手看看有没有语法错误!Good morning,my name is yuying,It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself,I hope i can make a good performance today .Now i will introduce myself ,I am 24 years old,born in Har
没有语法问题,但是这文章写的.太生硬,太简单了.我给你改改
Good morning,my name is YuYing, I appreciate the opportunity to make a self-introduction, I wish I could have a great performance today.
I was born in Harbin city and graduated from Harbin University of Commerce with a bachelor degress in 2011, I am 24 now, my major is Accounting, I have acquired basic knowledge of accounting and passed CET4 test, I love study and always willing to accept challenges, my first job was an accountant in a private company after my graduation in July 2011.
I have a dream since I was a child, I dreamed that I can fly in the blue sky like a bird one day. Now my dream would come true if you provide me with the job, and I promise I will make my best to do everything well just because I cherish the opportunity.

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My major is in Accounting.I spend most of my time on study ,then I have passed CET4.In July 2011, I began to work for aprivate company as a Accounting in Haerbin city.

Good morning, my name is yuying Yu Ying, It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself, I hope i I can make a good performance today . Now i I will introduce myself ,...

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Good morning, my name is yuying Yu Ying, It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself, I hope i I can make a good performance today . Now i I will introduce myself , I am 24 years old, born in Harbin City . I graduated from Harbin University of Commerce.
My major is Accounting.And i I got my bachelor degree after my I graduation in the year of 2011. I spend most of my time on study , I have passed CET4. And iI have acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time. In July 2011, I began to work for aprivate appropriate company as a Accounting in Haerbin Harbin city.
I have a dream since I was a child.I dream that one day I can fly in the blue sky like the a bird. Now I have the chance to make it come true. If iI can take this job. I’ll try my best to do everything well.Because . I love this job.

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